Monday, May 25, 2026

On "Eternity"

    As of 2 minutes ago, I just finished a new lyric for this song. Though the music of "Eternity" has remained almost unchanged from its first draft, the lyric has received more rewrites than, I believe, any other moment in the show.

    For much of its life, it was a solo number for the Archer, who delivered it to an otherwise unresponsive Wife, too feeble to interject. The intent was to show the way he needed to leap over himself to justify leaving, highlighting that the decision was a fundamentally self-interested one, rather than a heroic sacrifice. That didn't land, not only because I wasn't able to make the lyric stick the emotional landing, but because the Wife needed to be engaged in the scene. That meant she would need to sing.

    This had the added benefit of giving the Archer something to respond to. His turn to vulnerability is no longer a neurotic shirking of guilt, but the softening of a brave face; it's much more sympathetic. (Even so, a part of me laments the loss. I enjoy a less-than-heroic Archer.) The issue, though, is that now both characters had very few syllables with which to express themselves. I tried to add in a short chorus, but alas, the austere simplicity of the AABA bound me too tightly. So it's been a continual process of futzing with the lyrics down to the morpheme so all the emotional, and dramatic, information gets deployed comprehensibly and artfully. Hence, the long gestation process.

    This is the sort of song my lyric writing professor would call a "hookless wonder". He warned me they were very difficult to pull of, and I believe him a lot more now than I did when he first told me. What he DIDN'T warn me about, though, was how damn hard these were to title. For a while, the song was called "Make Our Moments Stay", and the Archer sang it in both the first and last verse. When I removed it from the first voice, the title no longer seemed to stick. I settled on "Eternity" because "The Potion" felt too removed, and "Eternity" was a word both the Archer and the Wife end up singing. I'm happy to solicit a better title in the comments.

    Here's the new lyric in full. Let's all pray this is the one that sticks, no?

Archer:
DON'T GET UP.
DRINK THIS ELIXIR AND YOU CAN LIVE FOREVER.
THE EMPEROR FORGAVE ME,
AND GAVE ME LIFE AMONG THE STARS.
YOU TAKE THIS NOW.
I'LL JOIN YOU THERE SOMEHOW.
AND THEN ETERNAL LIFE IS OURS.
I'LL SEE TO IT ETERNAL LIFE IS OURS.

Wife:
LIFE AMONG THE STARS, WHAT A MARVEL.
I'M DEEPLY GRATEFUL, BUT I COULD NEVER TAKE THIS.
WHAT GOOD'S ETERNITY,
IF I CAN'T SPEND IT HERE WITH YOU?
I KNOW YOU'VE TRIED.
NOW STAY HERE BY MY SIDE,
AND FILL MY DAYS UNTIL THEY'RE THROUGH.
WE'LL BE TOGETHER 'TILL MY DAYS ARE THROUGH.

Archer:
YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND WHAT I'M SAYING.
IF I MUST, I WOULD CLIMB ANY MOUNTAIN, CROSS ANY SEA.
IF I MUST, I WOULD HOLD HEAVEN HOSTAGE 'TILL THEY AGREE.
HOWEVER SMALL THE ODDS,
I'D TAKE THEM OVER STANDING BY.
I CAN'T BEAR TO WATCH YOU DIE.

I CAN'T STOP HOPING
THAT SOMEWHERE THERE'S AN ANSWER.
SOME WAY TO BRING YOU BACK.
SOME WAY WE BOTH CAN MAKE IT THROUGH.
I'LL FIND A WAY
TO MAKE OUR MOMENTS STAY,
OR I'LL COME RIGHT BACK HOME TO YOU.
I PROMISE I'LL COME RIGHT BACK HOME TO YOU.

    Singing them back to myself, I just started crying. I think that's as good a sign as any, no?

Sunday, May 24, 2026

On "Jade Rabbit (Mercy)"

    In my breakdown of "You Go", I talked about my approach to unusual metric schemes. Because I personally have such a strong physiological reaction to groove and rhythm, I tend to think of meters as, implicitly, tied to the circadian rhythms of the characters. I hear the underlying pulse as a heartbeat, or a gait, or a communicative flow. "Jade Rabbit (Mercy)" takes this idea to its most extreme. Though the core of the song is nominally an ABAC (I'm a sucker for traditional forms, even in unusual contexts!), once the beat kicks in, it takes 17 bars until the same meter occurs two measures in a row. You can see 4 different meters in 6 bars below:


    Why would I torment these poor performers with rhythms this dense? And, furthermore, with extreme and difficult-to-tune dissonances like parallel 9ths and 7ths? It's not simply because I think it sounds cool and kicks ass, which for the record I do. The Emperor has just lost 9 children in one day. I feel that his grief, and rage, are towering, so much so that if I brought him onstage, it would change the show's emotional center of gravity. That's part of why I mediate the interaction through the rabbit; it gives the Emperor some much-needed distance, ensuring he doesn't have the chance to steal the scene.

    Even so, I wanted to hold the audience in a sort of state of immediacy with the Emperor's emotional intensity. I'm paraphrasing here, but George C. Wolfe talks about the way a repetitive groove can cause an audience to skate over a dramatic moment. When the audience can't locate a downbeat, can't adjust to a tempo scheme, can't identify a tonality, they're confronting the music much more directly. That lets me load in all the musical anguish I can, knowing that an audience will take it straight to the jugular, so to speak.

    There's another way I set the audience up to best absorb this number. I start the scene out with a short, musically simple comic moment with Magpie "becoming" the rabbit, and the Archer reacting to her arrival. If that sequence weren't there, we'd transition straight from the somber ending of "It's Coming Down" into the rage of "Jade Rabbit (Mercy)". With the moment of contrast, however, the audience has a moment to relax again, so that the ferocity of the Emperor's emotion hits them fresh. I think a lot of operas in particular shoot themselves in the foot by neglecting this sense of relaxing tension. An audience acclimatizes to anything that's sustained, even if what's sustained is emotional and musical intensity. By taking away their sense of expectation and introducing contrast, whether within or between numbers, you engage them more completely.

    Doesn't it all kick so much ass, though? I love contemporary classical writing so much, y'all.

"One after one after one after one after one/and then show mercy..."

Magpie's Song visual references

    I found these pictures before the first production of Magpie's Song at Yale, to serve as common visual references and inspiration as I continued to develop the score. These images were compiled in the early days of AI, just as the technology was beginning to produce sophisticated, realistic images but before it was common practice to screen for AI when sourcing art. I hate AI, and I'd never platform it, nor do I give anyone permission to platform my art in any sort of conjunction with AI-generated material; I take this as a historical artifact.


MAGPIE + THE SHOW


THE LOVE STORY


THE WAR STORY


THE MONSTER STORY

Thursday, December 18, 2025

On "It's Coming Down"

    This song was, in small part, inspired by "The Western Wall". That number culminates in full-throated rock counterpoint, complete with an electric guitar soloing over not one, but two riffing vocalists. When I first saw the piece, I remember that musical climax pushing me right to my saturation point, and relenting right when I felt I couldn't take in any more information.

    "It's Coming Down" was an exercise in pushing past that point, and accessing total musical overwhelm as a dramatic affect. The counterpoint is too dense with layers for the audience to grasp; the richness and dissonance of the texture makes it impossible to catch anything more than fragments of lyrical and melodic information. Just when the ear has had enough, the counterpoint muscles forward with renewed ferocity as the band slams out huge stabs, a thundering heartbeat. The effect is totally disorienting and overwhelming, and simulates for the listener how Archer is trying, and failing, to "block out the noise". In the heat of the moment, he can't center himself, so neither can the audience's ear.

    If Johann Joseph Fux were alive to hear this, he'd have a heart attack, which delights me to no end. Dramatic music affords the adventurous composer the freedom to pursue musical ideas that wouldn't hold up to standards of clarity and cohesion in a piece of concert or pop music.

    When I was looking for visual references for Magpie's Song, I found this painting of Hou Yi shooting down the suns. I loved the imagery of the Emperor's sons being birds, and the undeniable pile of broken bodies accumulated in frame. This idea never found its way into the show, because the sons being birds gets confusing when Vega is a human woman, but the image has always stuck with me, so I wanted to share it here.

    "Just hold on tighter to keep my hands from shaking..."

Tuesday, December 9, 2025

Art on Art

In no particular order, a living list of my favorites:

    FICTION

If On a Winter's Night a Traveler (particularly Chapter 8), Calvino.

Josephine the Singer, or, the Mouse Folk, Kafka.

    ESSAYS

The Birth of Tragedy, Nietzsche.

Letters to a Young Poet, Rilke.

The Origin of the Work of Art, Heidegger.

"The Storyteller", Benjamin.

    MUSIC

Lempicka (particularly "I Will Paint Her" and "Just This Way"), Gould + Kreitzer.

"Finishing the Hat", Sondheim.

"Now Feels Bigger than the Past", Stevens.

    OTHER WORKS

Faust, "2. Prelude on the Stage", Goethe.

Ramon Subercaseaux in a Gondola, Singer Sargent.


If you'd leave your favorites in the comments, I'd love to seek them out. I adore art on art.

Sunday, August 3, 2025

Dinner with a broadway composer

    The other day, I was fortunate enough to cap a summer spent working as an intern/assistant to a broadway composer I'll leave unnamed with a dinner, where I asked them all the questions I had about life as a professional songwriter for musical theatre. Here are some of the most valuable things they imparted, the sorts of things I'm glad I had someone tell me instead of learning the long way 'round. I write this in the spirit they brought to the dinner: the will to share the factets of building a life in musical theatre it's hard to teach, or talk about.

    A lot of our conversation was them explaining the mechanics of three levels of theatre-making: off-off-Broadway, off-Broadway, and Broadway.

OFF-OFF-BROADWAY.

    The world of day jobs, where everybody starts. There's no commercial producers, and no money. Theatre spaces will pay you hundreds of dollars, at most, to put up your pieces, and they're run by one or two people, so getting them to know you and your work is the way you get your foot in the door.

    These small theatres are good sites to mount productions, but so too are concert spaces- Joe's Pub is on the high end, but spaces like it could entertain concert productions and readings.

    All spheres of theatremaking rely on personal connections, but the preprofessional/early professional space especially so. This is alarming to a strange bird introvert like me, who finds many interactions difficult to navigate and draining. Two things this composer said about their experience reassured me: one, that everyone in the theatre world is a little strange, so any fumbling I would feel inside my skin would get lost in the noise, and two, that it took them years and years to meet his closest collaborators. It was a decade or so into their work in the theatre to meet a director collaborator they've worked with on 3 of their shows, for example. I hope those observations are as reassuring and galvanizing to you as they were to me.

OFF-BROADWAY.

    Off-Broadway is the world of commission work. An off-Broadway theatre, like the Signature or MCC, will pay you a flat fee- a little less than a year's wages for "a year's work" (it takes about a year, if not less, for them to write a show, so their year counts for more than the rest of us). The good news: if your show is a commercial bomb, you're still paid the same. The bad news: if your show is a commercial smash, you're still paid the same. Your revenue comes exclusively from the commission.

    The people who will be securing you these commissions on the institution's behalf are artistic directors; they're who you're going to want to ensure you make a connection with in order to get your work developed and produced at a professional standard.

BROADWAY.

    Usually, getting to Broadway looks like a producer "swooping in" on a show and buying its rights. For about five years, as the show continues to be developed, you don't see money for it, even up through the production process for Broadway. Then, once the show opens, you get a healthy cut of the box office royalties.

    Big productions abroad pay similarly well to Broadway royalties for the duration of their runs. Licensing rights from smaller productions are individually insignificant; a show has to be produced a fair bit for it to be an appreciable source of income instead of a respectable cushion. Fiscally speaking, having a show stay open on Broadway seems preferable to a hit on the community theatre circuit seems preferable to a show that the musical theatre intelligentsia drool over.

BEYOND BROADWAY.

    I was surprised by how open this composer was talking about writing with commercial ambition. Because I characterized them as a more artsy, experimental writer, it was a shock to hear them say they modeled the structure of one of their flagship shows off of Les Mis, and wrote it with Broadway ambitions from the start, though they were still working well off-broadway at its inception. They talked about how a show of theirs with a cast of 4, virtually no set, and low barrier to musical entry was one of their most popular shows on the amateur theatre circuit. They contrasted this with pieces they've written that demanded virtuosic singers and performers, and pieces that were intensely personal and linked to recent events. Those pieces never find the same foothold after their flagship productions, and they don't contribute significantly to this composer's income.

    I'd also noticed this tendency towards actively working to make pieces produceable in Adam Guettel, who originally orchestrated Light in the Piazza for piano trio (though that didn't last), and deliberately wrote Days of Wine and Roses for two and a half singers. It seems to me that the more one's tendencies skew off the beaten path, the more actively one needs to think about steering one's pieces back towards being feasible to perform and stage on the community theatre level. After all, that's the stage on which pieces find their longevity, audience, and sustainable profit, all the things you want as a career artist.

PARTING NOTES.

    An agent shouldn't start your career, but join your career. When you get to the point where it would be useful to have someone to advocate and negotiate on your behalf with institutions and producers, or read contracts with you, talk to theatre artists you admire who are doing what you want to do and ask who's representing them. That'll point you towards where you need to go.

    This composer recommended to me the book "Song of Spider-Man", by Glenn Berger, the second bookwriter hired to fix "Spider-Man: Turn Off the Dark". We were talking about how quotidian the day-to-day of writing and developing a Broadway musical seems to be, and they said that book described that tension well. When I get around to reading it, I'll be sure to post about it.


I googled the contents of our meal in their entirety; here's the first google result.

Tuesday, July 22, 2025

On "Archery Lesson"

    This song is built off of one of my favorite lyrical techniques, one I intend to talk about more later (probably with "Light's Returned" or "Follow the Spark"? we'll see), where the one lyric is given multiple meanings by the dramatic context. In this case, the lessons double as Archer mentoring Apprentice through dealing with grief, trying to lead him to a place of stability and peace in a language Apprentice would actually listen to.

    I needed a backbone to structure the action, so I came up with the idea of Apprentice getting one shot per day. Later, I learned of a telling of the original myth where Hou Yi outpaced Peng Meng in a contest shooting geese; I wish I had heard of it before I started writing the song, so that I might have built it around this contest instead of contriving my own variation on the myth, but I'm very satisfied with how it turned out.

     When I was finding the musical material for this song, I built myself a short playlist that captured the world I wanted it to live in. Those songs were:

    Ultimately, of course, other influences end up sneaking in.
    When I make these sorts of playlists, looking for bricks I'll use to build a song, I try my damndest to avoid putting musical theatre songs on them. I believe that musical theatre is a medium, not a genre, which means that the music that flows through a piece shouldn't merely be beholden to artificial "contemporary musical theatre conventions". (I'm talking about sus chords and noodly piano figures and just enough modal interchange to self-consciously "spice up" simple pop songwriting and what have you.) Those conventions come from musical theatre songwriters failing to expose themselves and their work to sufficiently diverse musical ideas, thus walling themselves off to wider fields of musical experience and pleasure. That's the vital importance of the Yazbeck challenge.

    As another example, here's the playlist for a song I'm working on now for OVERMAN, my Nietzsche rock opera, where Nietzsche and Wagner meet, get krunked out of their minds, and fall a little in love:

    "And every day you keep trying/'cause if you don't, no one else picks up the slack..."

On "Eternity"

    As of 2 minutes ago, I just finished a new lyric for this song. Though the music of "Eternity" has remained almost unchanged f...